As writer’s it’s easy for us to get stuck in a groove or a
track. Round and round we go. But unlike the view from a merry-go-round, we
don’t want our readers seeing the same scenes or words over and over. If we
repeat, it should be intentional.
So, what constitutes unnecessary repetition?
Reading the same word too close together or too often is
boring. This doesn’t include really common words. “The
more common the word, the more leeway you have in repeating it,” Brian Klems
says. But for other words, it’s a danger. For example, there are many
words to indicate eating. I might munch, crunch, gulp, slurp, etc. We bite,
chew, swallow as part of the process. If every time my character eats, the word
used is always the same, a reader may get annoyed. The more unusual the word, the
more obvious overuse is. The shorter the piece, the more an overused word will
Overuse of Names
Be aware of how often you use a character’s name in
“Bob, when you’re at the store…”
“Will you pick up lettuce, Bob?
“And, Bob, don’t forget tomatoes.”
Sounds unnatural, doesn’t it? And there’s no action.
“This is redundant” is a note I put on a student lesson when
the information has already been given. I often find it with the same wording.
It’s like the writer forgot she wrote it. This means she is probably not spending
enough time revising.
“Trust the reader to get it” is often in response to the
writer showing the reader, then telling the same thing. For example:
Jordan pulled his cell phone out of his jeans pocket and tapped the screen. “Come on, come on. What time is it?” The phone lit up. “Four o’clock! Leo’s gonna kill me.” He shoved his feet into untied shoes, and laces flapping, raced out the door.
Jordan was late to work.
The first paragraph shows Jordan’s late for something. We
don’t know what, but when he shows up at work, we’ll get it. “Jordan was late
to work” is telling. Not as interesting, besides being unnecessary.
How do you find
overused words or repetitive information in your own writing?
- Check common overused words and see if they are
culprits in your writing. Here’s a short list: about,
actually, almost, like, appears, approximately, basically, close to, even,
eventually, exactly, finally, just, kind of, nearly, next, practically, really,
seems, simply, so, somehow, somewhat, sort of, suddenly, that, then, utterly,
- Read your writing aloud. Or you can have your
computer read it to you. You’ll probably hear a word or two that occurs too
often, and hopefully information that you’ve already told the reader.
- If your manuscript isn’t too long, use an online
tool to catch words. You’ll copy the text and paste it in. I’ve found several
- A word counter, such as https://wordcounter.com/ literally counts
words and shows the results. You can ask it to exclude small words.
- A word cloud maker. The larger the word shows in
the resulting image, the more often it has been used. Here’s a generator I’ve
tried: https://www.wordclouds.com/ Of
course, you’ll probably see your main character’s name a lot as well as common
words. But what else are you seeing?
- Get feedback from others. Use a critique group
or beta readers.
Fixing Overused Words
Some can simply be eliminated. A writer I knew called them
“weasel words”—they slip their way into your writing. Removing them doesn’t
change the meaning of the sentence.
Consider taking an adverb and weak verb and replacing both
with one stronger verb. Did she slowly climb the tree or did she inch up the
tree? Same idea for adjectives and nouns. Is that big dog a Labrador or a Great
Dane? See how these latter examples give you a better picture?
Think about other words you could use—we all know a lot! Ask
yourself if you are using the best word. “It’s cloudy” could refer to an
overcast day, a storm about to cut lose with rain, or a hurricane, but each
would be very different to experience. A thesaurus is a useful tool if you get
stuck, but choose words you know. Or consider how to say the sentence
It can be difficult to find out where you’re stuck on repeat—that’s
why using different methods is helpful. But once you become aware of your common
patterns, you can use find or search in your word processor to track down the